Correction/lettre motivation
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Message de banzai22 posté le 26-10-2015 à 14:21:42 (S | E | F)
Bonjour ,
j'ai énormément de mal à faire des phrases sans fautes et qui ont un sens explicite en anglais.
Si quelqu'un veut bien jeter un coup d’œil pour voir au moins voir les grosses fautes .
Merci beaucoup pour votre aide.
I am currently doing a two-year post-A-level study in marketing techniques at the University Institute of Technology . I’m looking for a work placement from the 2nd May to the 3th June 2015 and I would be grateful if I can make this placement in your company.
Jacadi is the ambassador brand for children's fashion. The opening of lot stores allows promoting the French clothes in the whole world. Jacadi improve the childhood and makes of the entire child a little fashion addict. Each parent can find whatever they want and that’s it who inspired me.
With my formation, I will acquire some qualities in business functions. We explore of different part of marketing and management. Thank of this formation we would adapt easily to the professional world.
My summer job in a large retail learned sense of responsibility and I wish to implement my skills in your company. I would be highly motivated to be actively involved with your firm and discover more exactly the sector of the sale.
Thank you for your time and attention please let me know if I can answer any questions.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-10-2015 19:27
Message de banzai22 posté le 26-10-2015 à 14:21:42 (S | E | F)
Bonjour ,
j'ai énormément de mal à faire des phrases sans fautes et qui ont un sens explicite en anglais.
Si quelqu'un veut bien jeter un coup d’œil pour voir au moins voir les grosses fautes .
Merci beaucoup pour votre aide.
I am currently doing a two-year post-A-level study in marketing techniques at the University Institute of Technology . I’m looking for a work placement from the 2nd May to the 3th June 2015 and I would be grateful if I can make this placement in your company.
Jacadi is the ambassador brand for children's fashion. The opening of lot stores allows promoting the French clothes in the whole world. Jacadi improve the childhood and makes of the entire child a little fashion addict. Each parent can find whatever they want and that’s it who inspired me.
With my formation, I will acquire some qualities in business functions. We explore of different part of marketing and management. Thank of this formation we would adapt easily to the professional world.
My summer job in a large retail learned sense of responsibility and I wish to implement my skills in your company. I would be highly motivated to be actively involved with your firm and discover more exactly the sector of the sale.
Thank you for your time and attention please let me know if I can answer any questions.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 26-10-2015 19:27
Réponse: Correction/lettre motivation de kogan, postée le 03-11-2015 à 01:20:19 (S | E)
Bonjour!
Une des fautes est ambassador brand il faudrait écrire brand ambassador car on ne peut pas vraiment dire cela dans ce cas-ci.
Aussi, il y a attention please, il faut rajouter une virgule et "that’s it who inspired me" Il faudrait remplacer le who par un what car c'est un fait et non des personnes.
Merci!
Réponse: Correction/lettre motivation de lucile83, postée le 03-11-2015 à 08:43:43 (S | E)
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With my formation, I will acquire some qualities in business functions. We explore of different part...pluriel? of marketing and management. Thank of this formation we...pourquoi changer de pronom? would adapt easily to the professional world.
My summer job in a large retail ... learned...autre verbe sense of responsibility and I wish to implement my skills in your company. I would be highly motivated
Thank you for your time and attention , and please let me know if I can answer any questions....autre formule
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